likesummer on July 12th, 2018, 5:12 pm
Don't forget guys! The print raffle is still on~! After next week I'll open shop for prints! Ty as always for reading and faving!
lunabob on July 14th, 2018, 7:46 am
The text...kind of flows really weird this page? Like, I almost feel like I skipped one. Not sure how else to word it
lunabob on July 14th, 2018, 7:53 am
Hm. I think the ‘which part’ is where it begins, but that can be inferred over if you go back to the page about getting him vaccines. The page with Dakota clenching his fist is kind of where the dialogue doesn’t feel like it matches what the other guy was saying. Unless Kennedy really thought this whole setup with the girls was supposed to be consensual, I guess..?
*dakota, not Kennedy
likesummer on July 19th, 2018, 4:56 pm
@lunabob Thanks for the CC! I think this page is a bit awkward for a few reasons. As there's a few weeks gap between this one and the page its a continuation of, it might not read as well for those who just go straight for the new page. However I agree that it's not perfect. As I am already working on pages 6 weeks ahead of this one I don't have the time to go back right away but I will remember this and reconsider moving things around before I take Indigents to print next year!